Removed. Posted January 21, 2017 Posted January 21, 2017 (edited) Superlative ManPower Level: 8 (150/150)Unspent Power Points: 0Trade-Offs: +1 Defense/-1 Toughness, +1 Club Attack/ -1 Club Damage In Brief: A man struggling with being unable to be noticed Catchphrase: "Watch out!" Theme: "Hear me now"- Hollywood Undead https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pdoIs1jZbCY Alternate Identity: UnknownBirthplace:Freedom City Residence: Superlative Man is homeless.Base of Operations: Downtown Freedom CityOccupation: UnemployedAffiliations: Works on his own.Family: Superlative Man has no family members Description:Age: 28 (DoB: 1989 Day & Month])Apparent Age: Late 20sGender: MaleEthnicity: CaucasianHeight: 6'1Weight: 152Eyes: BlueHair: Dirty Blonde If you were to see Superlative Man you would see a biker looking fellow who is wearing white primary motorcycle gear with a golden trim around the shoulders and a golden setting sun on the back of the jacket. His visor is solid gold in color and he wears black gloves and shoes. Has a toned build. History: Dr.Lobe cackles as the final piece of his wonderfully evil DEATH RAY was assembled. After Months of work soon the world will fear his genius might! But before he send his DEATH RAY into space to wreak destruction he needed to personally test the effects of it on the public...and what better representation of the public then the local homeless population, after all no one will notice a missing homeless nobody. "Bring in the test subject!" Cackled Dr.Lobe. 2 faceless goons carried a half conscious man who looked like he's seen better day and strapped him into the restraints of the test chamber. Dr.Lobe's eyes twinkled with glee as he prepared his mighty DEATH RAY. "Huh what's going on? Let go of me!" Said the restraint man only be be met with more cackling from Dr.Lobe. "Soon you will no longer exist when my mighty DEATH RAY shines upon you! Activate the ray!" The beam slowly glowed brighter and brighter before it shined a magnificent light upon the restraint man. When the Ray was turned off the man was no where to be seen. However the man was still there as instead of disintegrating him outright it erased his existence. Soon after the ray was turned off a local superhero busted through the wall and engaged the mad Dr.Lobe in combat defeating him and leaving the room in rubble. Hours later the Undetectable man rose from the ruins unaware of where he was and more importantly who he was. Superlative Man decided to find out just what happened to his image and figured what better way to do it then to confront super villains as a hero. However to be a hero Superlative Man realizes that he needs a base of operation. So he went underground literally and spent the next 14 months build his base and getting used to not being able to see himself so that he will be properly prepared to fight villains. During this time he investigated what had happened to him and found it it was due to a low time wanna-be world dictator Dr.Lobe. Wanting to find Dr.Lobe and reverse whatever cause him to be unseen is easier said than done as shortly after being incarcerated Dr.Lobe escaped from imprisonment and hasn't been seen since. The 14 months of isolation combined with being able to look at himself in the mirror has led to a less than stable mindset. Personality & Motivation: Superlative Man has gone somewhat stir crazy over not being able to look at himself anymore not being noticed by anyone which is his main cause for becoming a superhero because as he sees it if he fights crime then villains will have to notice him. He tries at every chance to have interactions with others to prove his own existence. Nonetheless he still tries to do the right thing in the end. Powers & Tactics: Superlative Man doesn't fight head on or fairly. Instead he attacks when there is an opening and only then. If he cannot get the jump on an enemy then he will try sabotage the enemy's equipment. Superlative Man's focus in group efforts is acting as a saboteur by going behind enemy lines and breaking things whether its using his computer skills to hack into systems or disable device skills to rip apart wiring of death machines. Power Descriptions: There is no appearance of his powers as his powers is of concealment from visual senses. Complications:Ignored: Because of his amazing power its somewhat difficult for Superlative Man to maintain relationships as people tend not to notice him. Impoverished: Superlative Man has no resources outside of taking from villians to help him fight crime. Amnesia: Due to the madness that was Dr.Lobe Superlative Man has lost his memories prior to gaining his power. No self Image: Superlative Man cannot perceive himself visually as his power affects him too. Insomnia: Being able to see through his own eyelids have made it difficult to sleep.Abilities: 10 + 4 + 4 + 4 + 4 + 0 = 26PP Strength: 20 (+5) Dexterity: 14 (+2) Constitution: 14 (+2) Intelligence: 14 (+2) Wisdom: 14 (+2) Charisma: 10 (+0)Combat: 8 + 10 = 18PP Initiative: +2 Attack: +9 Melee, +4 Ranged. Defense: +9 (+5 Base, +1 Dodge Focus), +3 Flat-Footed Grapple: +9 Knockback: -3Saving Throws: 4 + 6 + 8 = 18PP Toughness: +7 (+2 Con, +4 Defensive Roll, +1 Armor) Fortitude: +6 (+2 Con, +4) Reflex: +8 (+2 Dex, +6) Will: +10 (+2 Wis, +8)Skills: 152R = 38PP Acrobatics 6 (+8) Climb 6 (+11) Computers 8 (+10) Craft 4 (Chemical) (+6) Craft 6 (Electrical) (+8) Craft 6 (Structural) (+8) Craft 6 (Mechanical) (+8) Disable Device 8 (+10) Drive 10 (+12) Escape Artist 8 (+10) Intimidate 6 (+6) Investigate 6 (+8) Knowledge 6 (Streetwise) (+8) Medicine 6 (+8) Notice 8 (+10) Search 8 (+10) Sense Motive 8 (+10) Sleight of Hand 10 (+12) Stealth 10 (+12) Survival 8 (+10) Feats: 33PP Accurate Attack Attack Focus 1 (Melee) Attack Specialization 2 (Club) Defensive Roll 4 Dodge Focus 1 Elusive Target Equipment 7 Evasion Fearless Feature (Supply Caches around the city) Improved Critical 2 (Club) Improvised Tools Instant Up Inventor Jack-of-All-Trades Luck 2 Movie-By-Action Power Attack Takedown Attack 2 Track Equipment: 8PP=40EP Audio Recorder [1EP] Cellphone [1EP] Flash Goggles [1EP] Flashlight [1EP] Gas Mask [1EP] Handcuffs [1EP] Laptop [1EP] Lead Pipe (Damage 2) [4EP] Leather Jacket (Toughness 1) [1EP] Mini-Tracer [1EP] Motorcycle (Extra; Speed 7, Alarm, Hidden Compartments, Oil Slick, Smoke Screen, Tracking Device, Remote Control [17EP] Re-breather [1EP] Sewer System HQ: Size: Small; Toughness 10; Features: Communications, Computer, Concealed, Garage, Living Space, ESP 6 (Visual and Audio Feed; Extra: Subtle, Rapid, Flaws: Medium-Limited to cameras around the city),Security Systems, Workshop [9EP] Powers: 16 + 0 + 0 = 16PP Concealment 4 (Sense Immunity; Extra: Continuous, Flaws: Permanent) [16PP] (Superlative Man is permanently immune to being sensed visually. The power itself is scientific photonic in nature causing light to not reflect off of him form.) Drawbacks: (-0) + (-0) = -0PP DC BLOCK Attack Range Save EFFECT Unarmed Touch DC 20 Toughness Damage Lead Pipe Touch DC 22 Toughness Damage Totals: Abilities (26) + Combat (18) + Saving Throws (18) + Skills (38) + Feats (33) + Powers (16) – Drawbacks (0) = 150/150 Power Edited January 28, 2017 by Vorik Added corrections based on Escalsneerg's reply.
Ecalsneerg Posted January 27, 2017 Posted January 27, 2017 On 21/01/2017 at 7:28 PM, Vorik said: Superlative ManPower Level: 8 (150/150)Unspent Power Points: 0Trade-Offs: +1 Defense/-1 Toughness, +1 Club Attack/ -1 Club Damage In Brief: A man struggling with being unable to be noticed Catchphrase: "Watch out!" Theme: Alternate Identity: ??? (Public) or (Secret)Birthplace:Freedom City Residence: Superlative Man is homeless.Base of Operations: Downtown Freedom CityOccupation: UnemployedAffiliations: Works on his own.Family: Superlative Man has no family members Description:Age: 28 (DoB: 1989 Optionally, Day & Month])Apparent Age: Late 20sGender: MaleEthnicity: CaucasianHeight: 6'1Weight: 152Eyes: BlueHair: Dirty Blonde If you were to see Superlative Man you would see a biker looking fellow who is wearing white primary motorcycle gear with a golden trim around the shoulders and a golden setting sun on the back of the jacket. His visor is solid gold in color and he wears black gloves and shoes. Has a toned build. Firstly, you can edit out the blue text as it's only a marker for the template, so you can delete the Theme: and the Optionally, Day & Month. Also, you should list some form of alternate identity. If you know it, then it should say even if he doesn't know, if even you don't know, you should just denote it as 'Amnesiac' or 'no known identity'. Quote History: Dr.Lobe cackles as the final piece of his wonderfully evil DEATH RAY was assembled. After Months of work soon the world will fear his genius might! But before he send his DEATH RAY into space to wreak destruction he needed to personally test the effects of it on the public...and what better representation of the public then the local homeless population, after all no one will notice a missing homeless nobody. "Bring in the test subject!" Cackled Dr.Lobe. 2 faceless goons carried a half conscious man who looked like he's seen better day and strapped him into the restraints of the test chamber. Dr.Lobe's eyes twinkled with glee as he prepared his mighty DEATH RAY. "Huh what's going on? Let go of me!" Said the restraint man only be be met with more cackling from Dr.Lobe. "Soon you will no longer exist when my mighty DEATH RAY shines upon you! Activate the ray!" The beam slowly glowed brighter and brighter before it shined a magnificent light upon the restraint man. When the Ray was turned off the man was no where to be seen. However the man was still there as instead of disintegrating him outright it erased his existence. Soon after the ray was turned off a local superhero busted through the wall and engaged the mad Dr.Lobe in combat defeating him and leaving the room in rubble. Hours later the Undetectable man rose from the ruins unaware of where he was and more importantly who he was. Superlative Man! decided to find out just what happened to his image and figured what better way to do it then to confront super villains as a hero. Personality & Motivation: Superlative Man is a fun loving somewhat childish man who has gone somewhat stir crazy over not being able to look at himself anymore not being noticed by anyone which is his main cause for becoming a superhero because as he sees it if he fights crime then villains will have to notice him. Nonetheless he still tries to do the right thing in the end. Powers & Tactics: Superlative Man's atoms are transparent and gives off no visual feedback. Power Descriptions: There is no appearance of his powers as his powers is of concealment from visual senses. Complications:Ignored: Because of his amazing power its difficult for Superlative Man to maintain relationships. Impoverished: Superlative Man has no home or resources to help him fight crime. Amnesia: Due to the madness that was Dr.Lobe Superlative Man has lost his memories prior to gaining his power. No self Image: Superlative Man cannot perceive himself visually as his power affects him too. Insomnia: Being able to see through his own eyelids have made it difficult to sleep. OK, most of this looks good, especially the complications, but maybe expand a couple of sections. What's Superlative been doing and living since the accident? What hero rescued him? Where's Dr Lobe now? Also maybe split it into some paragraphs. I'd also expand on the tactics. How does he use his powers? Does he rely on stealth and surprise attacks? You could very easily write a little more for a couple of sections here. Quote Abilities: 10 + 4 + 4 + 4 + 4 + 0 = 26PP Strength: 20 (+5) Dexterity: 14 (+2) Constitution: 14 (+2) Intelligence: 16 (+3) Wisdom: 14 (+2) Charisma: 10 (+0) You've got 16 Intelligence listed, when the breakdown and the maths indicates 14. Quote Combat: 8 + 10 = 18PP Initiative: +2 Attack: +9 Melee, +4 Ranged. Defense: +9 (+5 Base, +1 Dodge Focus), +3 Flat-Footed Grapple: +9 Knock-back: -3Saving Throws: 4 + 6 + 8 = 18PP Toughness: +7 (+2 Con, +4 Defensive Roll, +1 Armor) Fortitude: +6 (+2 Con, +4) Reflex: +8 (+2 Dex, +6) Will: +10 (+2 Wis, +8) I'd denote Base Attack for clarity's sake. Plus, melee bonus does add to grapple, so it should be +14. Additionally, we round base defence down when determining flat-footed Defence, so +5 rounds down to +2, and so an odd value is a waste. Knockback is also all one word. However, otherwise, all the maths adds up fine here. Quote Skills: 152R = 38PP Acrobatics 6 (+8) Climb 8 (+13) Computers 10 (+13) Craft 4 (Chemical) (+7) Craft 6 (Electrical) (+9) Craft 6 (Structural) (+9) Craft 6 (Mechanical) (+9) Disable Device 8 (+11) Drive 10 (+12) Escape Artist 8 (+10) Investigate 8 (+11) Intimidate 6 (+6) Knowledge 6 (The Streets) (+9) Medicine 6 (+8) Notice 10 (+12) Search 8 (+11) Sense Motive 8 (+10) Sleight of Hand 10 (+12) Stealth 10 (+12) Survival 8 (+10) Ok, firstly, please follow the template. There's no need to bullet point things. Secondly, by Knowledge (The Streets), do you mean Streetwise? This adds up to 160r = 40PP, so you're 2PP short here. Quote Feats: 33PP Accurate Attack Attack Focus 1 (Melee) Attack Specialization 2 (Club) Defensive Roll 4 Dodge Focus 1 Elusive Target Equipment 7 Evasion Fearless Feature (Supply Caches around the city) Improved Critical 2 (Club) Improvised Tools Instant Up Inventor Jack-of-All-Trades Luck 2 Movie-By-Action Power Attack Takedown Attack 2 Track Adds up, but again, no bullet points. Quote Powers: 16 + 0 + 0 = 16PP Concealment 4 (Sense Immunity; Extra: Continuous, Flaws: Permanent) [16PP] (Superlative Man is permanently immune to being sensed visually.) Equipment: 8PP=40EP Audio Recorder [1EP] Cellphone [1EP] Flash Goggles [1EP] Flashlight [1EP] Gas Mask [1EP] Handcuffs [1EP] Laptop [1EP] Lead Pipe (Damage 2) [4EP] Leather Jacket (Toughness 1) [1EP] Mini-Tracer [1EP] Motorcycle (Extra; Speed 7, Alarm, Hidden Compartments, Oil Slick, Smoke Screen, Tracking Device, Remote Control [17EP] Re-breather [1EP] Sewer System HQ: Size: Small; Toughness 10; Features: Communications, Computer, Concealed, Garage, Living Space, ESP 6 (Visual and Audio Feed; Extra: Subtle, Rapid, Flaws: Medium-Limited to cameras around the city),Security Systems, Workshop [9EP] Drawbacks: (-0) + (-0) = -0PP DC BLOCK Attack Range Save EFFECT Unarmed Touch DC 20 Toughness Damage Lead Pipe Touch DC 22 Toughness Damage Adds up, but Equipment should be in a quote block immediately after Feats. You should also include a descriptor for the source of his Concealment, so we know what sort of effects interact with it. You should also include a bottom line showing the final maths total, as shown on the sheet template. I also have some concerns over a perpetually invisible character. How will he interact with other player characters going forward in the long term, and form relationships?
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